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“Kill that bastard, how many times I have said you not to reveal our gang name, ‘U xxxx’. Come here now and listen to the plan carefully. Tonight we should loot the safe with minimal risk and that is our ultimate goal. This is the picture of Alston Station, the beautiful place that going to make us millionaires and this blue print is our key to success.
“Hey dear please don’t cry, please we will elope tonight, believe me please”, I repeated those words several times but she doesn’t seems to be convinced. I don’t know what to do but finally uttered these words to convince her, “Xue, Xue, I love you so much dear and I promise that Zing weds Xue by tomorrow”. After hearing these words, she relieved a little and showed some confidence on my plan. “Dear, come out of your room by 23:00 hrs via the back door and wait near the palace station. At 23:20 hrs, E-Cube Express will reach the station and in compartment number three, they will load the safe that has to be sent to Central Bank of Alston. Get into in it by 23:28 hrs and make sure you are not noted by anyone and safe”. “How will you come then?” said she. “At Alston Station, I will get into the train by 00:00 hrs via the bogie entrance. Once we reach CBA, we will take the tram to Numanso and will marry there”. She smiled with happiness, came near to me and kissed me with bliss. I enjoyed the dish, looked into her eyes, smiled and left the palace.
“Our King, Zahang have ordered us to assassinate Zing”. I informed my army. “I, Caleb will be the in charge for this operation.” I marched my army to his place but he was not found there. We planned to stay there and fulfill the King’s Order.
I noticed Caleb with his army near my place. My heart beat increased as I don’t know how to escape from them but silently said to myself that I can do it. I repeated this until I became calm and went to Zing Huah Temple instead of my place. I stayed there until an hour left to the midnight and then started to Alston station via Star Forest.
“How many time should I shout at you bastard, never reveal our gang name, “U xxxx”. We have less than an hour left to become millionaires. Why don’t you understand that?” I shouted at U2, the genius of our gang. I felt that someone else also were there in Star Forest. But due to over confidence I didn’t take it serious and let it free…
I noticed U and his gang discussing about safe. I hide myself in the bushes to listen their conversation.
U2: “Boss can you please repeat the plan once more”
I: “I can’t kill a genius like you but your memory loss kills me. According to our plan, U4 will update us what is happening from gate 6 and as soon as the train reaches the station, you will break open the bogie entrance of compartment number four. U3 and I will get in using the same to loot the safe”
Oh My God, this is a bad sign for the government. Somehow, I have to stop this, think Zing think, I said to myself. Finally, I got a way to overcome U gang and that is by breaking the link between compartment three and four.
“Sir, one of the army officials found Zing passing through Star Forest it seems”, said one of the head. I was confused at first but later guessed Zing’s plan to elope with Xue using the E-Cube Express. I ordered my army to move fast to Central Bank of Alston station.
U4: “The train has reached the station and there is no real threat for us”, as soon as U2 received these information, he rushed to compartment number four, broke open the bogie four within seconds, and signaled, “Hip, Hip, Hip”. U3 and I rushed to the train and settled in. As per my plan, I stabbed U2 with a poisoned knife. We went inside the train and started searching for the safe.
As I said Xue, I got in to compartment number three and broke the link between the three and four in seconds. I searched for Xue in every corner of the compartment and at last found her in an unconscious state in the rest room. I poured some water on Xue to wake her up. “Xue, Xue, are you ok” and she smiled as a response. I happily hugged and kissed her to express my happiness.
U3 and I felt that the train is moving in the reverse direction. To confirm it I looked out and was shocked to see that we were behind the place we got in. As soon we got down, U4 came running angrily shouting at us for what I did to U2. I took my knife and cut his throat without any guilty. U3 and I rushed to the secret under pass and used our horses to go to CBA. I knew horses are faster than these trains. Moreover, as I expected I reached CBA sooner and broke the railroad with a bomb.
“Zing the train has stopped”, said Xue. I put my head out to confirm the same, noticed that the railroad is broken, U and a dead body near him. I ran towards U with a powerful force and struck him with confidence. But that irony bullshit doesn't even step back. He was as solid as rock, I repeatedly hit him but nothing happened to him. In his one blow, I almost become semiconscious. I heard a roaring voice, “I will finish you now”. However, nothing happened to me and when I opened my eyes I found Caleb fighting with U. No one can match “U” and Caleb is not an exception as he too was almost defeated by U. I somehow managed to grab a sword nearby the dead body and once again ran towards U and saved Caleb. Although I am not a good at it, I know to use sword well. I struck him thrice, cut his two hands and made him fall to the sand.
“Stop it, Zing. Don’t kill him and spoil your life. I order you to put down your sword and stand still.” In the mean time rest of the army reached as we took Zing, Xue and U to the palace. I explained everything to King Zahang and waited silently for his response
“Caleb, throw this U to elephant foot and let them crush this brutual killer”. I paused after ordering that and waited until they took him out of the palace. “Caleb, arrange for a grand marriage ceremony, I want to gift my daughter to the Savior of Alston” and I smiled.
I was the happiest man in the entire palace. The reason behind it was simple but precious, “Zing weds Xue”. I was true to my country, my love and for my promise.
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"முகமறியா நண்பர்களின் கருத்துக்களே எனக்கு படிகற்கள்"
“I can’t kill a genius like you but your memory loss kills me." :)ha ha ha.....
ReplyDeleteThat statement made me smile SiS! :)even laugh out loud!
This is interesting, a modern-tech looters story...:)
All the best Sis! Good morning! :)
Wow, wonderful, the first beginning make me want to read on, very interesting :3~ and beautiful ending =P
ReplyDeleteGood luck for BAT15^^~
@ Amity
ReplyDeleteGlad to know that felt it interesting and made you laugh.. Thank you so much Amity for your wishes...
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@ Riika
ReplyDeleteGlad to know that you felt it interesting.. Thank you so much for your wonderful wishes and thoughts..
This is the first time I penned down a thriller in a movie concept.. I hope it came out well..
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Nice pacy narrative with story converging from the three angles.
ReplyDeleteWonderful story.
ReplyDeleteI thought of many possibilities and quite a few people have posted on these possibilites but you idea is Unique.
I loved it.
This will be among top 10 posts for sure :)
wow nicely written and scripted... i visualized the entire thing like a movie scene :) all the best for the BAT
ReplyDeleteMind it SIS, that looks like a perfect script for the next Rajnikanth Movie!! ;)
ReplyDeleteTotal Hit!!
All the Best for BAT -15 (and production of that movie).
The conversational pattern of narration made the story more realistic. Quite innovative on-the-spot technique of plot development. Interesting. All the best for BAT.
ReplyDeleteinteresting story!! gud luck
ReplyDeleteHey SIS..
ReplyDeleteReal good story..
And ya!! Good Luck!
ReplyDelete@ The Fool
ReplyDeleteWelcome back... Happy to hear those sweet words from you.. Thank you so much..
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@ Md. Muddassir Shah
ReplyDeleteGlad to know that you loved the story and felt it wonderful.. Thanks a lot for your encoraging words.. And also for your wishes..
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@ RaNiiiiii
ReplyDeleteGlad to know that you felt it like a movie.. Thanks a lot for your wishes..
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@ Rumya
ReplyDeleteAww Rumya you made my day.. SUPER STAR is my favorite hero, if by chance he acts for my script., then i will be on cloud 9 sure..
Thanks for your wishes and wish you the same..
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@ Cherry Blossom
ReplyDeleteGlad to know that you loved the conversational pattern.. Thank you so much for your wonderful words and encouragement..
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@ Srikanth
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Srikanth for the sweet words and wishes..
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@ Zainab Urooj
ReplyDeleteHappy to know that you felt it good..
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@ Zainab Urooj
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Zainab Urooj for your encouraging words and wishes..
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Hey u worked a lot with that story I gues! Very Good and all the best :)
ReplyDelete~Shruti
@ Shruthi
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot for your sweet encouraging words Shruthi.. will surely visit yours..
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good one....3 different plots crossing each other, the idea is good...punches in between were nice :) Good read :)
ReplyDeleteAll the best!
P.S. I am not great in English either, but there were some obvious grammer mistakes. u need to work on grammer a little...otherwise u r a good story writer.
I dont know if you chose the names of the characters to add a deliberate tinge of levity but they certainly heighten the contrast of the more sinister parts of the post!
ReplyDeleteGreat piece of writing-well planned and wonderfully executed.
Zing weds Xue indeed! Love stories with an action background always tantalizing! Good job!
ReplyDeletetoo many threads running. nice use of colors to differentiate between threads/persons and perspectives. different approach and a great job here. :D
ReplyDelete@ Megha
ReplyDeleteHappy to hear those words from you.. and yes I am working on it.. I almost made sure that I am going wrong anywhere.. But this is my first attempt in telling a story like this..
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@ Brijender Singh
ReplyDeleteHappy to hear those words from you.. Thank you so much for mentioning about the naming strategy, yes I did it on purpose..
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@ Sidra Sayeed
ReplyDeleteWelcome to Few Miles! Happy to hear those words from you.. Thank you so much..
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@ Vee
ReplyDeleteHappy to hear from you.. Thank you so much Vee..
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Hello SiS,
ReplyDelete1.I'm sure you have taken lot of efforts to put it all in place.
2.It will make a good movie-script ;)
3.Glad its a happy ending.
4.The names Xue,Caleb and Zahang sound like the names of Chinese tall story ;)
5.Colorful post!
6.Complete entertainer!
All the Best with BATOM :D
Very interesting post. Unique is more ways than one, least of all the names... all the best and do check out my blog as well
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@ Raksha Raman
ReplyDeleteFirst of all I welcome you to my blog. Happy to know that you termed my post as complete entertainer.
I love happy endings and most of the times I do that.. Thanks you so much for appreciating the efforst put in this..
Thanks for the wishes and wish you the same..
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@ Lolland
ReplyDeleteWelcome to Few Miles. Happy to know that you felt it interesting and unique..
Thanks for the wishes and will stop by yours too..
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Hi!
ReplyDeletedear honestly speaking, i found it too long to hold my concentration. wish it could be made crisper and shorter.
But nevetheless, I can see the hard work gone in it. threading two or more stories together, weaving them... needs lot of effort and creativity.
ATB FOR BAT!
@ A Restless Mind With A Sensitive Heart!
ReplyDeleteThanks for your appreciation and encouraging words..
Yes I took the word count into consideration and this is less than 1500 words, normally you can read if it is one thread but here three threads are running so it is difficult to understand and I too accpet that..
But this is my first try like this.. I am awaiting for the response..
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this was like part rajnikanth, part chinese action movie. loved the way you've threaded all the bits and pieces together and the overall arrangement. great work.
ReplyDelete@ reetam
ReplyDeleteThank you so much for your encouraing words.
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Hey SiS what an imagination wonderful pace and real crafty work in bringing the story with 3 different perspective simultaneously.
ReplyDeleteATB for BAT-15
@ Vikas Khair
ReplyDeleteThank you so much for those encouraging words and wishes..
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