The blue moon and the icy breeze
Treasure the sheen of love in her eyes
Kissed my twin soul with thy blaze
Never ending water, a place to amaze
A feast for the cynosure eyes
The blue moon and the icy breeze
Pleasant mood for the twin soul craze
A hint of lust in her eyes
Kissed my twin soul with thy blaze
Stars reflects on the glaze
The happy hearts twinkle in our eyes
The blue moon and the icy breeze
An unforgettable day marked on this date
The twin souls express it in eyes
Kissed my twin soul with thy blaze
I love my love with the love I rhyme
Feeding the hunger of the haunting eyes
The blue moon and the icy breeze
Kissed my twin soul with thy blaze
A villanelle, I am penning down this form of poetry for the first time. I hope it rhymes as per the form and sounds romantically. I thank Amity for the inspiration that made me to pen down this Villanelle.
The form looks like this
Refrain 1 (A1)
Line 2 (b)
Refrain 2 (A2)
Line 4 (a)
Line 5 (b)
Refrain 1 (A1)
Line 7 (a)
Line 8 (b)
Refrain 2 (A2)
Line 10 (a)
Line 11 (b)
Refrain 1 (A1)
Line 13 (a)
Line 14 (b)
Refrain 2 (A2)
Line 16 (a)
Line 17 (b)
Refrain 1 (A1)
Refrain 2 (A2)
Published as a part of
Poetry Potluck at Jingle Poetry
, Theme: Beaches and MountainsPoetry Pantry at Poets United
Room for Romance #2
Blue Monday at Smiling Sally
Monday Poetry Train Revisited
Three Word Wednesday - Hint, Lust, Sheen
One Shot Wednesday at One Stop Poetry
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"முகமறியா நண்பர்களின் கருத்துக்களே எனக்கு படிகற்கள்"
thoughtful and beautiful poem.
ReplyDeleteroom for romance image is perfectly cool,
love the blue!
Interesting form and very romantic!
ReplyDeleteWow...so, you did it successfully...:-)
ReplyDeleteI love the message of the poem, 'soulful'.. :-)
And I have a fellow-Villanelle writer now...-)
Excellent attempt my dear! Keep up! :-)
very soulful and romantic piece, with some great lines. Thanks for sharing - and thanks for taking Amity's challenge.
ReplyDeletewonderful lines.
ReplyDeletethere was certainly hints of romance in it,
liked it. :)
Woww!!!! Beautiful Write Up!!!!!!!
ReplyDeletevery beautiful. both the poem and the picture are perfect, dreamy, enchanting.
ReplyDeletetrisha
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Congrat on completing a Villanelle--they are so challenging. I've only written one (published in last week's one shot) and don't know if I have the courage to try another. You succeeded in the form and the theme!
ReplyDeleteWonderful and now you have inspired another poet to try the villanelle style. Thank you for sharing this.
ReplyDeleteDude,
ReplyDeleteOne post for soooooo many contests. And you managed to come up with a poem that inetersects all these topics.
laudable job!!
you rock
how is everything?
ReplyDeletemiss you in the spot..
hope you well...
Happy Monday!
Potluck is open, welcome in.
So powerful and beautiful, inspiring me to try this form as well. Thanks for linking with Potluck xxx
ReplyDeleteenjoyed reading it and you are very creative with your words and thoughts.. liked it.. thanks
ReplyDeleteजय दुर्गा जी, जय काली माँ
Jai Durga ji, Jai Kali Ma
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great concept
ReplyDeletevery nice...between you and victoria i may have to give this forma try. you pull off the form nicely...and a great take ont eh theme for rom for romance...i really like the idea behind it...
ReplyDelete@ Jingle
ReplyDeleteAWW.. Ji, Happy to hear those beautiful words from you.. With your blessing I love to explore more..
--Someone Is Special--
@ Mama Zen
ReplyDeleteThank you so much for your sweet words.. I am happy on reading those..
--Someone Is Special--
@ Amity
ReplyDeleteWow! Amity.. I did it successfully, oh very happy..
I am flying to Cloud 9.. Glad to know that you loved the message and felt it excellent..
Thank you so much Amity for your sweet words..
Special Congrats on winning the BAT.. You deserve it dear..
--Someone Is Special--
@ ThomG
ReplyDeleteHappy to hear those lovely words from you ThomG... Thank you so much.. Happy to be a fellow villanelle writer...
--Someone Is Special--
@ Anurag
ReplyDeleteHappy to hear those wonderful words and to know that you liked it... Thank you so much Anurag..
--Someone Is Special--
@ Creativity!!
ReplyDeleteWelcome back Creativity!! after a small gap.. Glad to know that you felt it beautiful.. Thank you so much Creativity!!
--Someone Is Special--
@ trisha
ReplyDeleteGlad to know that you felt it beautiful, perfect, dreamy and enchanting.. Thank you so much trisha...
--Someone Is Special--
@ Victoria
ReplyDeleteYou made my day.. Thank you so much for your wonderful wishes and thoughts.. Happy to know that you too try it..
--Someone Is Special--
@ Kristen Haskell
ReplyDeleteAww I am cloud 9 Kristen Haskell.. Glad to know that you were inspired by this style and do try and let me know to enjoy it..
--Someone Is Special--
@ Md. Muddassir Shah
ReplyDeleteHappy to see you back Md. Muddassir Shah.. Thank you so much for your encouraging words and wishes.. Do be regular on my blog..
--Someone Is Special--
@ Jingle
ReplyDeleteJi, little unwell and busy, that's the reason for the absentism for three days.. I am back now.. Linked in Poetry Potluck and hoping to have fun this week..
--Someone Is Special--
@ Amanda
ReplyDeleteAww. Amanda you made me fly to cloud 9.. Happy to hear that you were inspired by my try..
Thank you so much and do let me know once it is up.. I will enjoy the read.. HAve fun..
--Someone Is Special--
@ Shashi
ReplyDeleteHappy to know that you like it.. Thank you so much for your wonderful encouraging words..
--Someone Is Special--
@ fiveloaf
ReplyDeleteThank you so much fiveloaf..
--Someone Is Special--
@ Brian Miller
ReplyDeleteAww. Brian you made me fly to cloud 9.. Happy to hear those words and glad to know that you like it..
Thank you so much and do let me know once it is up.. I will enjoy the read.. HAve fun..
--Someone Is Special--
You just about blew me away with that breathtaking blue scene. Gorgeous. You are very, very talented. Your words are perfect. I truly enjoyed every aspect of my visit to your blog today.
ReplyDeleteThe blue moon and the icy breeze - simply magical!
ReplyDeleteAn interesting poetic form. The repetition of lines is lovely. A very romantic feel to this offering. Beautiful!
ReplyDeleteWell executed villanelle...they definitely aren't easy to write...this one flowed smooth and easy...kudos to you. (^_^)
ReplyDeleteI can feel the closeness and the intimacy...even though there is a hint of frost in that ones Awareness..with an icy breeze...enjoyed SIS and thanks for sharing this poem...very creative as well(+)
ReplyDeleteDom*:)
A delighful find and read. I loved the imagery and romantic tones.
ReplyDeleteBest wishes,
Eileen
So lyrical and so beautifully romantic. Just lovely!
ReplyDeleteWhat a serene image you have there.. I was almost looking at the image lost when I just came back that I had come here to read the words..
ReplyDeleteSome words you have written here.. mountain of words.. Very deep and Intense.. well done S :D
Happy Potluck
http://oliviasmindlymatters.wordpress.com/2010/05/26/water-and-wind-and-an-un-grained-me/
wow..that's an interesting format..yes it rhymes and yes it sounds very romantic :) Yummy treat for the potluck..thanks for sharing!!
ReplyDeletei know i commented the other day but wanted to say it was nice to see you at oneshot!
ReplyDelete@ LV
ReplyDeleteOMG you made me to fly to cloud 9. Thank you so much, very happy to hear those encouraging words..
I am glad to know that you enjoyed all the aspects of visiting my blog..
--Someone Is Special--
@ ninotaziz
ReplyDeleteSiS, can you come down from Cloud 9, no way after reading the magical comments.. Thank you so much ninotaziz ..
--Someone Is Special--
@ Sherry Blue Sky
ReplyDeleteGlad to know that you felt it romantic and beautiful.. Thank you so much for those sweet words.. I learnt this form from Amity... Credits goes to him..
--Someone Is Special--
@ dasuntoucha
ReplyDeleteKudos to me, thank you so much, once again went to cloud 9.. Thank you so much for your encouraging words..
Glad to know that I executed well..
--Someone Is Special--
@ Dom*
ReplyDeleteGlad to know that it was creative and you felt the intimacy.. Thank you so much Dom* for those wonderful words..
--Someone Is Special--
@ Eileen T O'Neill .....
ReplyDeleteGlad to know that you felt it romantic and delightful.. Thank you so much for your sweet words..
--Someone Is Special--
@ TALON
ReplyDeleteThank you so much TALON, glad to hear that you felt it romantic and lyrical..
--Someone Is Special--
@ Olivia
ReplyDeleteOnce again to cloud 9..Glad to hear that olivia.. Thank you so much for your wonderful and encouraging words..
I loved your entry for Potluck as well..
--Someone Is Special--
@ asmiworld
ReplyDeleteGlad to know that you found it romantic and rhyming as per the format.. Happy to hear that it was a Yummy treat..
Thank you so much asmiworld..
--Someone Is Special--
@ Brian Miller
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Brian.. Once your Villanelle is up let me know, I am wating for the feast..
--Someone Is Special--
Beautifully written SiS... I have no words. Man look at the response...
ReplyDeleteVillanelles are a tough form to write and you did a great job with it.
ReplyDeleteI would never criticize this effort! Only praise for the form. Nicely done romantic verse.
ReplyDeleteI think villanelles would have been much more popular if they'd had cut-and-paste way back when.
ReplyDeleteNice One Shot!
@ Zainab Urooj
ReplyDeleteGlad to hear that Zainab, thank you so much for your encouraging words..
--Someone Is Special--
@ poemblaz
ReplyDeleteThank you so much poemblaz.. Happpy to know that I did a great job.. Thanks..
--Someone Is Special--
@ Strummed Words
ReplyDeleteThanks for your appreciation.. Glad to know that.. Yeah it is a romantic one..
--Someone Is Special--
@ Eric Alder
ReplyDeleteThanks you so much Eric Alder... HAppy one Shot..
--Someone Is Special--
Romantic, great concept execution.
ReplyDelete@ steve
ReplyDeleteGlad to know that.. Thank you so much..
--Someone Is Special--
This poem was more like a painting than words. Very pretty. Thank you :)
ReplyDeletevery, very good for your first villanelle - very romantic also..sigh..
ReplyDeleteA2 and a rhyme perfectly - blaze and craze - but A1 and A2 should rhyme as well - maybe if you like, you could replace breeze with haze or something..?
Amazing use of form...I couldn't even spell it before today!
ReplyDelete@ autumnraven
ReplyDeleteGlad you loved it, thanks and SmileS..
Someone is Special
@ Claudia
ReplyDeleteGlad to know that.. Oh is it.. This is my first try.. So very happy.. Thanks and SmileS..
Someone is Special
@ repressedsoul
ReplyDeleteGlad to know that.. SmileS and very happy.. Try it, you will enjoy it..
Someone is Special