On a pleasant evening with the moon,
I rhymed waters for you to reach soon!
With the birds singing the song,
I rhymed waters with you along!
Trees danced with the gentle breeze,
I rhymed waters for time to freeze!
With plectrum striking the guitar strings,
I rhymed waters with your lips!
Tuning the scales with the pegs,
I rhymed waters for thy bliss!
With the heavy love watering the soul,
I rhymed waters for my twin soul!
Published as a part of
I will be nominating 1 to 10 poets before EOD. Sorry for the delay Ji.
This poem have won the Outstanding Poet Awards for Week 29
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"முகமறியா நண்பர்களின் கருத்துக்களே எனக்கு படிகற்கள்"
Beautifully written dear.
ReplyDeleteMy fav line "I rhymed waters... "
This is as sweet as it could be- beautiful rhyming of words.. almost felt like a dream.. The purple Image- I loved it- you know well- just why.. :D
ReplyDeleteReading you is always a delight. I kind of lose my self reading your words..
"With plectrum striking the guitar strings,
I rhymed waters with your lips!"
My heart had skipped a beat if not two..
Happy Rally
My entry:
http://oliviasmindlymatters.wordpress.com/2010/04/24/678/
i like the rhyming water that a cool pairing..so you are hitting 100 posts? congrats!
ReplyDeleteperfect rhymes and rhythms,
ReplyDeletethis piece is very extraordinary.
love the beauty in both words and image.
Happy 100th post ...
ReplyDeleteGlad to see you grow and do such an amazing job along the way.
Thanks for the participation!
@ Zainab
ReplyDeleteThank you so much and I am happy to know that you loved it dear...
--Someone Is Special--
@ oliviasbiopiclog
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Olivia, you made my day with such beautiful encouraging words. Happy man to know that you loved and glad to know that it skipped a beat or two..
You made my day.. Thanks surely will visit you..
--Someone Is Special--
@ Brian
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Brian, with blessing from people like you i love to write more and more..
--Someone Is Special--
@ Jingle
ReplyDeleteI am happy to know that you loved the piece... Thank you so much Ji.. Happy to hear those from you..
--Someone Is Special--
this write is mystic..
ReplyDeleteas a musician I am in love with the picture and thought.
beautifully written
@ Jingle
ReplyDeleteJi, I am really happy to hear those from you. After Leo and you visited my blog, I started to grow more and explore more.
I still remember the first award you gave me on Friendship Day, thank you so much Ji.. Always happy to participate and This is a series of poem which explians love from first waters, thirsty waters, sweetned waters and thirsty waters and it goes on..
I specially love to put these for Thursday Poets Rally.
Thank you Ji!!!!
--Someone Is Special--
@ woih
ReplyDeleteI am happy to hear those sweet words from you.. Thank you so much for your encouragign words..
--Someone Is Special--
Rhyming words and sweet poetry of wait... liked it so much... thanks for sharing...
ReplyDeleteॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya
At Twitter @VerseEveryDay for a verse everyday about love, longing and life
well penned...
ReplyDelete//I rhymed waters for time to freeze!//
loved this line... its so beautiful and tgoughful...
nice write..
http://thepoetrywagon.blogspot.com/2010/09/souvenir.html
Lovely sentiment, precious in every way!
ReplyDeleteSimply devine. I love, love, love it!
ReplyDeleteI saw many ! exclamation marks which allow me to see that it is in fact a very happy and emotional poem! It made me smile, very nice :)
ReplyDeleteLoved the imagery of the guitar and plectrum.
ReplyDeleteGreat poem :)
Kiera x
@ Shashi
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Shashi.. Happy to hear those from you...
--Someone Is Special--
@ Rajlakshmi
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Rajlakshmi.. You made me touch Cloud 9.. Thank you...
--Someone Is Special--
@ Kristen Haskell
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Kristen Haskell and also for being regular.. Do keep coming and make me happy with your thoughts on my post..
--Someone Is Special--
@ Thoughts Not Lost
ReplyDeleteOh Someone Is Special, please come back to earth... Cloud 9 after reading this.. I love your comment so so much.. Thank you so much for loving it..
--Someone Is Special--
@ Lu Ann
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Lu Ann.. I was happy when I penned down.. and always wanted to be..
--Someone Is Special--
@ kieraville
ReplyDeleteThank you so much kieraville for those sweet words..
--Someone Is Special--
So soothing and lovely. Thanks for your gift of sharing.
ReplyDeleteThat picture is amazing and the last two lines of the poem blew me away. Can I know how the picture was created? If so email me at the email my goggle gives. :) River
ReplyDeleteadventures in poesy
@ penelopephoebe
ReplyDeleteWelcome to Few Miles! Happy to know that you loved it.. Thank you so much..
--Someone Is Special--
@ River
ReplyDeleteWelcome to Few Miles! I am one again on Cloud 9. Thank you so much. About the picture, I just got it from my frend. It impressed me so much and it was apt for my poem so used it.. Thanks for the sweet visit, do be regular...
--Someone Is Special--
This is beautiful and flowing like the rhyming waters...I love the image... is that you? Congratulations on your 100 posts and thanks for coming to my blog ,so I could connect here with you as well. :) heartspell
ReplyDelete@ heartspell
ReplyDeleteOh so sweet of you heartspell... I am still hanging on cloud 9.. So sweet of you.. No it is not me.. But I have similar kind of photo.. I love to play guitar and enjoy that..
Thank you so much for your wishes on 100 posts.. Thank you once again..
--Someone Is Special--
These words, the images, the rhythm and rhymes are delightful.
ReplyDeleteHappy Rally!!
(and thank you for the comment on my blog!)
been so long since i tried to rhyme.
ReplyDelete=] goodjob.
Captivating right from the title--and with the rhythm, and the rhyme, and beautiful descriptions you give to us, that captivation never falters. Beautiful work.
ReplyDeleteThat was beautiful loved it
ReplyDeleteBikram's Blog
this is so sweet :)
ReplyDeleteloved it :)
The image is so beautifully reflected in the poem or vice versa!
ReplyDeleteI could happily hang this on my bedroom wall to read daily...Bravo!
Hi,
ReplyDeleteNice rhymes you got there. I've been practicing my rhymes because I suck at it. I admire people like you who can write nice poems and still rhyme!
~D
Lovely poem. Liked the imagery you have created.
ReplyDeleteLovely poem. Liked the imagery you have created.
ReplyDeleteCongratulations on your 100th post! Your poem here is great, so upbeat and it fits the picture perfectly. Nicely written!
ReplyDeleteThat's a cool pic, and a nifty idea,
ReplyDeletemy friend -- thought specialist ;)
And congratulations, too!
Peace, Uncle Tree
wow, what a lovely poem! i believe in twin souls so this was truly romantic.
ReplyDeletethanks for the lovely comment you left at my blog. :)
Beautifully musical - very sweet.
ReplyDeleteDeborah
http://deborahhorton.wordpress.com/2010/09/23/journey/
Nice, pretty good.
ReplyDeletehttp://jinglepoetry.blogspot.com/2010/09/monday-poetry-potluck-kings-queens-and.html
ReplyDeleteHello, friend:
Monday Poetry Potluck Is NOW open, linking is open from Sunday 8pm to Tuesday, 8pm, welcome join us by linking in 1 to 3 poems, you could use an old poem, the more you share, the happier we are…hurry up!
Thanks in advance.
Hope to see you in our lovely potluck…
@ Julie Jordan Scott
ReplyDeleteAww! Thank you so much for your delightful words and happy to know that you liked it..
--Someone Is Special--
@ kyogakura
ReplyDeleteThank you so much for your wishes.. read more and write more you can rhyme..
--Someone Is Special--
@ Chris G.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Chris for those words.. I am cloud 9.. happy to hear those from you..
--Someone Is Special--
@ Bikramjit
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Bikramjit for those encouraging words.. I am glad to know that you loved it..
--Someone Is Special--
@ Harshika
ReplyDeleteHappy Man.. Happy to hear that you loved it..
--Someone Is Special--
@ sillyfrogsusan
ReplyDeleteSomeone Is Special, where are you says sillyfrogsusan.
SiS: I am cloud 9 Bhaiya..
You made my day.. 12 hours of stupid work before the sytem and after reading this.. I am happy and love to pen down more..
This is most wonderful comment I have received so far.. Happy Man... :-) :-) :-)
--Someone Is Special--
@ D
ReplyDeletestill in cloud 9.. People thank you so much for the love.. I am very happy...
--Someone Is Special--
@ cerridwyntiponi
ReplyDeleteWow once again.. Thank you so so much.. I am the happiest man in this world..
--Someone Is Special--
@ frayedges
ReplyDeleteThank you so much for those wonderful encouraging words.. Loved to say HAppy Monday..
--Someone Is Special--
@ Uncle Tree
ReplyDeleteThank you so much.. Happy Man to read all these wonderful comments after a horrible 12 hours of work.. IT s****..
--Someone Is Special--
@ Bing
ReplyDeleteThank you so much.. Happy Man.. I totally surrender myself in twin souls..
--Someone Is Special--
@ Deborah
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Deborah for your recent constant support.. Happy Man.. Glad to know that you felt it sweet..
--Someone Is Special--
@ Ramen
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Ramen for those encouraging words..
--Someone Is Special--
@ Olivia
ReplyDeleteHi Dear Frend.. Thank you so much for the invite.. I always love to be there.. But for the past three days.. I am stuck up with lots of works..
As you know IT.. It is tough.. I will take a off for this week and will come back with a bang next weekk.. Happy Monday..
Once again thanks for your wishes..
--Someone Is Special--
@ all
ReplyDeleteThank you so much for your love.. You all made my day.. It was worst 12 hours but smiling now from my heart.. Thanks for that..
--Someone Is Special--
'I rhymed waters for time to freeze!'
ReplyDelete- what a great line because it teased my imagination! The whole poem painted such lovely imagery.
Thanks for sharing.
Donusho.
@ Donusho
ReplyDeleteWow you made my day with such sweet words.. Thanks a lot for you encouraging words..
--Someone Is Special--
You have well rhymed the feelings with water.
ReplyDelete@ Jagdish
ReplyDeleteThanks for all the sweet smiles.. You are so nice to me, reading all the posts that I FAV in BJ... Thanks..
Someone is Special
a beautiful melody of love:)
ReplyDelete@ sajeevkmenon
ReplyDeletea beautiful melody of love:) aww.. melody.. I am flying.. thank you so much for your constant
support and encouragement..
Someone is Special