I ran my fingers
on her forehead,
reminds me of water melon best slices
her mesmerizing eyes
so close to my eyes
reminds me of black grapes
her tiny ears
with sparkling studs
reminds me of country pears
kissing her cheeks
I brushed her with lips
reminds me of rosy pale apples
first, little kiss
on her sweet lips
reminds me of orange segments
her neck veins
that carries those lusts
reminds me of pineapples and avocados
her sweet hugs
and the warmth it brings
reminds me of those peanuts
These are a few of my favourite things
When I'm feeling sad
I gaze through the window
into the world where we lived
the darkness of the room
reminds she is no more
with tears in my red eyes
this is where it ends
though I never wished so
pain is unbearable, so
I close my eyes and simply
remember few of my favourite things
Published as a part of
Poetry Potluck @ Jingle Poetry, Theme: these are few of my favourite things
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beautiful (and tasty!)
ReplyDeleteWHOAH! This is lovely, romantic, sweet, touching, sad but oh so romantic awwwwwwww! I'm melting cause I love it SIS, AWESOME WORK! :)
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So well written, SiS, and so very romanic though poignant. A fine contribution to Potluck. Thank you.
ReplyDeletewow, a perfectly composed piece.
ReplyDeletevery well done.
A++
hmmm..
ReplyDeleteThat's a fruity romance!
Hugs x
Very nice SiS...sweet romance in this.
ReplyDeletesweet aftertaste :)
ReplyDeleteThat water-melon comparison was funny. :D
ReplyDeleteWe always think about the person who is no more or with whom we cannot be. :(
sweet and heavy...I am full! :)
ReplyDeleteGoodness, this is edible magic! Lovely.
ReplyDeleteA gentle touch, a fresh aroma wafting by, a tender kiss felt... these things so fill our hunger for the ones we miss. Delicate reminders of that one special person, that one special moment.
ReplyDeleteNicely penned.
This reminds me of one of the greatest love poems of all times...the Song of Songs from the Bible (also known as the Song of Solomon)
ReplyDeleteFirst I was like: this is so beautiful and light feel-good poem, and then the end came and gave it a whole different feel. It's actually better that way, so thank you:)
ReplyDeleteWow, how refreshing and sensation to include fruits into the expression.. *thumbs up*
ReplyDeleteHere is mine for this week.. :) http://www.tingtasy.com/2011/04/collections-of-tings-poetry-tp25-it.html
Tasty ripe fruits of love make a great comparison! Well done!
ReplyDeleteSo lovely and romantic. Love the comparisons.
ReplyDeleteVery Nice SiS, you have a winner in this one !!
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Aw, I wanted a happy ending, darnit! The first part was making me hungry, but the end took away my appetite. *sigh* 'Tis the sign of a well-written piece when you can evoke such things from readers!
ReplyDeletebeautifu; and sweet.. was a bit busy.. thanks for coming by my friend!
ReplyDeleterefreshing is all that i could feel after reading this! Lovely:)
ReplyDeleteI love this poem. I like the part about the orange . . . so sweet.
ReplyDeleteThats so fruitilicious:)
ReplyDeleteWonderful! That hits the spot. So well done.
ReplyDeleteSuch a tussle of emotions yet undeniably sweet in its underpinnings. Great write!
ReplyDeleteI love how you described the favorite things about your lover in comparison to fruits and then she was gone... Beautifully done, SIS!
ReplyDeleteWhat a beautiful and touching poem... loved it.
ReplyDelete@ Lolamouse
ReplyDeleteaww.. thank you so much..
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the romantic verser is back with a sweet romance. I love the way you compared your girl with fruits and I wish the last para is result of creativity and as always I admire, love, and what more I can say for your romance. 'The Best Romantic Writer I Have Ever Read Is Someone is Special', what more can I say?
ReplyDeletelove, bala
@ lynnaima
ReplyDeleteAww.. What a sweet comment is this.. Thank you so much Lynnaima..
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@ JamieDedes
ReplyDeleteThank you Jamie for your sweet words and blessings.. Happy Man..
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@ Jingle
ReplyDeletewhat more I need Ji... Thank you so much for your blessings..
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beautiful :)
ReplyDeleteshe sounds very tasty...smiles...lots of good fruits...and i love avacado!
ReplyDeleteShe sounds like a real peach!!
ReplyDeleteLove the grapes for eyes imagery.
remembering is bittersweet consolation.
ReplyDeleteso original! wonderful!
@ Olivia
ReplyDeleteGlad to know that Olivia.. fruity.. Happy Man..
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@ Reggie
ReplyDeleteHappy to read your encouraging sweet words.. Thanks..
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@ Sin
ReplyDeleteglad you like the sweet taste.. Welcome to Few Miles.. Happy Man to have you here..
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@ Nethra
ReplyDeletehmm you are right Nethra.. Thanks for your sweet words..
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@ bendedspoon
ReplyDeleteaww.. thanks much bendedspoon for your sweet words..
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@ honeyhaiku
ReplyDeleteGlad you love it honeyhaiku.. Thank you so much..
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@ Reflections
ReplyDeleteaww, thanks and of course those special moments are always favorite for one's heart..
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@ Victoria
ReplyDeleteGlad it reminded you one of the greatest love poems.. Happy Man..
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@ Krisse
ReplyDeleteKrisse Happy Man.. Glad you felt the essence of the poem..
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@ Krislin Neo, Ting
ReplyDeleteaww *thumbs up* so sweet of you.. Happy Man..
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@ dan roberson
ReplyDeletethank you so much dan.. you made my day..
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@ teric
ReplyDeleteGlad you love the comparisons teric.. Thank you so much for the encouraging words..
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@ JL Dodge
ReplyDeleteDodge, so sweet of you, thank you so much for the versatile blogger award.. I will showcase them soon..
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@ Dragon Katet
ReplyDeleteWelcome to Few Miles, Dragon Katet.. Glad the poem made you hungry but sorry for taking away your appetite. hmm and thanks a lot for your encouraging words.. :-)
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@ fiveloaf
ReplyDeletefiveloaf, so sweet of you, no issues my friend.. Whenever you visit me you make me smile.. thanks for it..
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@ cloud nine
ReplyDeletecloud nine, so sweet of you my friend.. everytime you visit me and make me happy.. thanks for all the constant support and encouragement.. Happy Man..
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@ Kay
ReplyDeleteKay, glad you love the poem and you liked the part about orange.. so sweet of you.. thanks for your encouraging words.. SmileS..
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@ Raksha Bhat
ReplyDeleteAww, thank you Raksha.. So sweet of you.. Happy Man..
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@ kshawnedgar
ReplyDeleteGlad to know that shawn.. Happy Man..
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@ abthomas
ReplyDeleteaww, thank you so much AB. So sweet of you..
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@ bodhirose
ReplyDeleteGayle, glad you love the favorite things. So sweet of you..
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@ sam
ReplyDeleteGlad you love it sam.. Sweet of you.. So sweet of you..
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@ bala
ReplyDeleteAww, bala, so sweet of you.. and of course the last para is just a result of creativity and nothing else.. hmm, you made me fly to cloud nine..
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@ Mia
ReplyDeletethank you so much Mia.. So sweet of you..
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@ Brian Miller
ReplyDeleteAww Brain, long time no see, of course she is.. and thanks I too love avacado..
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@ Jannie Funster
ReplyDeleteJannie Funster, Welcome to Few Miles.. Glad you love the imagery and thanks for your encouraging words..
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@ haikulovesongs
ReplyDeleteaww, glad you said those words.. Happy Man..
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isn't that the best way of living life???
ReplyDeleteremembering your fav things and life will be beautiful again :)
you must cherish the good memories and leave those bad memories behind.. :)
@ shweta
ReplyDeleteisn't that the best way of living life???
remembering your fav things and life will be beautiful again :)
you must cherish the good memories and leave those bad memories behind.. :)
yeah it is shweta..and I love to cherish..
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